So I wrote this poem. It’s kinda dark, but I would love to hear your comments on it.
The Need
In the dead of night
In the pitch of black
Like and owl swoop down for the kill
It comes
It seeks to swallow and consume
Like the coiled snake waits to consume its still quivering meal
It waits and seeks out the prey it knows will be you
It feasts and feeds upon your soul
You know it eats
You know it consumes
Yet, you let it be
You watch it devour you
First your heart
Then your mind
Then your body and soul
It wants you
It needs you
It consumes you
It feeds on your body
You feel the pain
You feel its teeth sink into your flesh
Your succulent and tasty pink flesh
You love the pain this bite brings
You love the ecstasy of the pain
If feels like light in the never ending darkness
The light of this pain is all that you need
It makes you feel safe, secure, needed
And it does need you
It needs you to hurt
It needs you to weep
It needs you to bleed
The blood flows freely now
Freely from your wrist
You let it all out to feed the need
The secret need of this beast
After coming across ur site i got to reading ur poetry and its amazing…not to mention quite scary how much it relates to me.
I think imma go comment on sum of ur other poems too, i saw u have mentioned u’d like to see what ur readers think? well i cant say i saw tht anyone has commented
so im gnna change tht 
At least u’ll know wat i think.
As fro this poem…dark it may be but there cant be a dark without light…and u do have hope
sum of ur poems hav shown it.
Comment by Shyres — September 27, 2010 @ 7:54 AM
Thanks for the comments. It’s always fun to hear what others think about them.
Comment by Drewpy — September 27, 2010 @ 12:06 PM